Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour.Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.Discuss bother these views and give your opinion.

Overall Score

总分

Some people think it is a kind of basic acceptance for a foreigner follows the culture and behavior of the countries they travelled to there, while, some others believe they should be welcomed when travelled to other country with their custom. As the travel industry developed, many travelers like to go out to different countries. The meaning of the travelling is not only enjoys the accommodation, food and landscapebut also experience different culture such as religion, heritage and so on. Accept and give a basic respect forlocal culture can make people be friendly with local residents and have a more enjoy journey.As a result they will also be respected by local people. Furthermore, with the acceptance for local culture,the tourist can learn more about the countries they traveled to and find a lot of interesting there. On the other hand, some people who refuse to accept local culture and behavior may think they are specialas a tourist, and need to be given a particularly treatment which make them comfortable to have a journey.But that disrespect may offend local inhabitants and even are not welcomed by them. To give an example,tourist who does not respect the tradition religion of the local area can be blamed by residents which will alsomakes they themselves not happy about it to say the least.In my opinion, the culture of the traveldestination countries usually have a deep relationship with their social history, although sometimes itseems that have huge difference with the culture of the tourist or are even hard to accept, they should respectit. In conclusion, no matter as a tourist or a local resident, it is important to respect the culture andbehavior of the people in other country. I think respect is a basic polite attitude that people should havewherever they are.

6.5

Task Response

The essay addresses the prompt and provides a balanced discussion of both views. However, the argument could be more developed with more specific examples and a clearer personal opinion. (文章讨论了两种观点，但论点可以更深入一些，并提供更多的具体例子和个人观点。)

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay has a logical structure, but there are some issues with transitions and paragraph organization. The ideas are not always clearly linked, and the flow of the essay could be smoother. (文章结构合理，但在段落过渡和组织上存在一些问题。观点之间的联系不够清晰，文章的流畅性可以提高。)

6.0

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is adequate but somewhat limited. There are some errors in word choice and usage, and more varied and precise vocabulary would enhance the essay. (使用的词汇基本足够，但有些局限。有一些词汇选择和使用上的错误，更多样化和精确的词汇会提升文章质量。)

6.0

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence structure. These errors affect the clarity and coherence of the essay. (文章中有一些语法错误，包括主谓一致、时态一致和句子结构。这些错误影响了文章的清晰度和连贯性。)

up to 6.5

Natural Rewriting

原文对比

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior, while others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. (明确指出两种观点) As the travel industry has developed, many travelers enjoy visiting different countries. The purpose of traveling is not only to enjoy the accommodation, food, and landscape but also to experience different cultures, such as religion and heritage. (解释旅行的意义) Respecting and showing basic respect for local culture can make tourists more friendly with local residents and have a more enjoyable journey. As a result, they will also be respected by local people. Furthermore, by accepting local culture, tourists can learn more about the countries they visit and discover many interesting aspects. (进一步说明尊重当地文化的好处) On the other hand, some people who refuse to accept local culture and behavior may feel they are special as tourists and need to be given special treatment to make their journey comfortable. (解释另一种观点) However, this disrespect can offend local inhabitants and make them unwelcome. For example, tourists who do not respect the traditional religion of the local area can be criticized by residents, which will also make the tourists themselves unhappy. (举例说明不尊重当地文化的后果) In my opinion, the culture of the travel destination countries usually has a deep relationship with their social history. Although it may seem very different from the tourist's own culture and even hard to accept, it is important to respect it. (表达个人观点) In conclusion, whether as a tourist or a local resident, it is important to respect the culture and behavior of people in other countries. I believe that respect is a basic polite attitude that everyone should have, no matter where they are. (总结全文)

Vocabulary Enhancement

"follows the culture and behavior" --> "adapts to the culture and behavior (适应文化和行为)",
"go out to different countries" --> "travel to different countries (前往不同的国家)",
"enjoys the accommodation, food and landscape" --> "enjoy the accommodation, food, and scenery (享受住宿、食物和风景)",
"give a basic respect for local culture" --> "show basic respect for local culture (对当地文化表示基本的尊重)",
"be friendly with local residents" --> "build friendly relationships with local residents (与当地居民建立友好的关系)",
"have a more enjoy journey" --> "have a more enjoyable journey (有一个更愉快的旅程)",
"refuse to accept local culture and behavior" --> "reject local culture and behavior (拒绝接受当地文化和行为)",
"need to be given a particularly treatment" --> "require special treatment (需要特别的待遇)",
"offend local inhabitants" --> "offend local residents (冒犯当地居民)",
"are not welcomed by them" --> "are unwelcome (不受欢迎)",
"blamed by residents" --> "criticized by residents (受到居民的批评)",
"makes they themselves not happy about it" --> "make them unhappy (让他们自己感到不高兴)",
"have a deep relationship with their social history" --> "have a profound connection to their social history (与他们的社会历史有深刻的联系)",
"seems that have huge difference with the culture of the tourist" --> "seem to have significant differences from the tourist's culture (似乎与游客的文化有很大差异)",
"it is important to respect the culture and behavior of the people in other country" --> "it is crucial to respect the culture and behavior of people in other countries (尊重其他国家人民的文化和行为是至关重要的)",

Correct Essay

原文修正

Some people think it is a kind of basic acceptance for a foreigner (to follow) the culture and behavior of the countries they travel to, while some others believe they should be welcomed when they travel to other countries with their customs. (缺少动词 'to follow' 和介词 'with') As the travel industry developed, many travelers like to go out to different countries. The meaning of traveling is not only to enjoy the accommodation, food, and landscape but also to experience different cultures such as religion, heritage, and so on. (缺少不定式 'to enjoy' 和 'and so on' 的使用不当) Accepting and giving basic respect for local culture can make people friendly with local residents and have a more enjoyable journey. As a result, they will also be respected by local people. Furthermore, with the acceptance of local culture, the tourist can learn more about the countries they travel to and find a lot of interesting things there. (缺少冠词 'the' 和 'things') On the other hand, some people who refuse to accept local culture and behavior may think they are special as tourists and need to be given special treatment, which makes them comfortable during their journey. (缺少逗号和连接词 'which') But that disrespect may offend local inhabitants and even make them unwelcome. To give an example, tourists who do not respect the traditional religion of the local area can be blamed by residents, which will also make them unhappy. (缺少逗号和连接词 'which') In my opinion, the culture of the travel destination countries usually has a deep relationship with their social history, although sometimes it seems to have huge differences with the culture of the tourist or is even hard to accept, they should respect it. (缺少逗号和连接词 'although') In conclusion, no matter as a tourist or a local resident, it is important to respect the culture and behavior of people in other countries. I think respect is a basic polite attitude that people should have wherever they are. (缺少逗号和连接词 'no matter')

Grammar Correction

语法修正

"Some people think it is a kind of basic acceptance for a foreigner follows the culture and behavior of the countries they travelled to there, while, some others believe they should be welcomed when travelled to other country with their custom."
"Some people think it is a kind of basic acceptance for a foreigner to follow the culture and behavior of the countries they travel to, while some others believe they should be welcomed when they travel to other countries with their customs. (缺少动词 'to follow' 和介词 'with')",

"As the travel industry developed, many travelers like to go out to different countries. The meaning of the travelling is not only enjoys the accommodation, food and landscape but also experience different culture such as religion, heritage and so on."
"As the travel industry has developed, many travelers like to go out to different countries. The meaning of traveling is not only to enjoy the accommodation, food, and landscape but also to experience different cultures such as religion, heritage, and so on. (缺少不定式 'to enjoy' 和 'and so on' 的使用不当)",

"Accept and give a basic respect for local culture can make people be friendly with local residents and have a more enjoy journey."
"Accepting and giving basic respect for local culture can make people friendly with local residents and have a more enjoyable journey. (缺少动名词 'Accepting' 和形容词 'enjoyable')",

"Furthermore, with the acceptance for local culture, the tourist can learn more about the countries they traveled to and find a lot of interesting there."
"Furthermore, with the acceptance of local culture, the tourist can learn more about the countries they travel to and find a lot of interesting things there. (缺少冠词 'the' 和 'things')",

"On the other hand, some people who refuse to accept local culture and behavior may think they are special as a tourist, and need to be given a particularly treatment which make them comfortable to have a journey."
"On the other hand, some people who refuse to accept local culture and behavior may think they are special as tourists and need to be given special treatment, which makes them comfortable during their journey. (缺少逗号和连接词 'which')",

"But that disrespect may offend local inhabitants and even are not welcomed by them."
"But that disrespect may offend local inhabitants and even make them unwelcome. (缺少动词 'make' 和宾语 'them')",

"To give an example, tourist who does not respect the tradition religion of the local area can be blamed by residents which will also makes they themselves not happy about it to say the least."
"To give an example, tourists who do not respect the traditional religion of the local area can be blamed by residents, which will also make them unhappy. (缺少逗号和连接词 'which')",

"In my opinion, the culture of the travel destination countries usually have a deep relationship with their social history, although sometimes it seems that have huge difference with the culture of the tourist or are even hard to accept, they should respect it."
"In my opinion, the culture of the travel destination countries usually has a deep relationship with their social history, although sometimes it seems to have huge differences with the culture of the tourist or is even hard to accept, they should respect it. (缺少逗号和连接词 'although')",

"In conclusion, no matter as a tourist or a local resident, it is important to respect the culture and behavior of the people in other country. I think respect is a basic polite attitude that people should have wherever they are."
"In conclusion, no matter whether as a tourist or a local resident, it is important to respect the culture and behavior of people in other countries. I think respect is a basic polite attitude that people should have wherever they are. (缺少逗号和连接词 'whether')",